Good lead in on the story, but the descriptions are so good that maybe you should space them out a bit more. I like the new words that you came up with ( Expurgator) and I like the quick way you describe the characters as you bring them into the story.
The masterful way the scene is detailed in the descriptive terms is wonderful! You've done a good job making us feel the madness and desperation in the mind and heart of the main character, and that was just in the prologue! I'm excited to find a quiet spot, put on my new age, and finish the rest:)
This is very helpful! I like the way that the information flows, it goes in a kind of order that any writer, new or seasoned can follow and I like that you don't dumb it down. As a writer there are certain terms oyu need to know, you know? Either way, very informative read.
i really liked this short story. i got scared at first when I saw the clown on the advert because I don't like clowns, but you did a good job bringing this story to life. It's fantasy and it really makes you think. I'm gonna read it again when I have a little bit more time so i can catch a little of what I
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