I loved your story buildup . my only suggestion would have to do with paragraph breaks to make the story easier to follow . the last hing is just a simple suggestion: make it a point to check paragraghs for errors before starting a new one. other then that great job!
loved the building of the story and how you set the mood so well. i would love to see the continuation of this story because it beautifully sets a tone . very beautiful job
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