Hello! I would first like to start out with saying that the dialog between your two characters is superb. Not only did it feel natural but it was just overall refreshing. Another good thing was the subtle interactions between both characters. Maybe they seemed errelivant but they helped paint a great mental picture of the tone and characters. Great work!
Hi! First off I would like to say I found this piece very enjoyable! The way you set the seen as well as the mood made it really relatable for anyone who has ever had this first date feel, the butterflies and the happy nervousness. Overall I found the story great, expeccially when it came to the "blind" date twist which I enjoyed for it being something refreshing as well as interesting. Thank you for sharing your writing! Great Job!
I am far beyond impressed with how this is writing. I really do enjoy the idea of two always being drawn together especially in the way that you described.
"Sometimes we were enemies, desperate to end each other. Sometimes we were lovers, desperate for the other's touch." - If I had to pick my favorite line it would have to be this one. How perfectly you described that attraction between two people, even if not all the time it is positive. Destiny working to bring them together regardless of how it will turn out.
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