Heh, this was... interesting. I found alot of it very funny, especially the brain goo and about the bad review on his blog. Correct me if I'm wrong, but is this making fun of how people react to bad reviews on blogs and writings? Because it honestly confused me. I liked the creativity in it, and how it was in a newspaper format. I really enjoyed this, and no, I'm not just saying that. Thank you again for sharing, and I hope you keep writing like this.
Keep writing strong!
-Lazar
This was really good! All of the rhymes were made so that they wern't too desperate, and all of the lines had a good rhythm to it. I like your idea of the mouse looking for cheese, but I couldn't figure out if you dislike or like mice. Keep writing like this, and you'll be a very succesful writer in your future.
Keep writing strong!
-Lazar
Wow. This may be the best story that I've read, ever. I am personally very interested in stories such as these, involving midevil themes such as fighting with swords and the such. And it was wonderful! Everything was just so well planned out and everything was realistic, from the fighting to the dying, everything seemed like it was right in front of you the whole time. There were almost no grammar mistakes, I think I counted 2. And usually, I would complain about there being no backround story, but the fact is this story does not need one! The problem with the stories with no backround stories is that they usually don't make any sense without it, but with this story it was clear there was your intention to leave this information out. It makes you wonder how the Stormbringers got into the fight, and that is just the beauty of it! Imagination is such a powerful force when it comes to writing! Just everything about it was incredible, even the names were creative. Sure, the ending was a bit cheesy and underdeveloped but once again, that doesn't matter in this situation, for the reader can come up with the situation! You just blew me away, please, keep making stories like this.
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