I really enjoyed this first chapter and can't wait to read more!
I think you've captured the fantasy nature of the story brilliantly and the bond between the bothers comes across as incredibly strong after just a few sentences.
There are a lot of narrative threads opened in this chapter, all of which will be exciting to follow and see how everything is connected.
Well Done :D
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