Wow! There were definalty some really great ideas there! It was really great as a short story, but maybe you could try writing more and make a short novel. The ending was conclusive but I think you could really progress the story and make something exciting out of it. The ending leaves a reader wanting to know more. There are also some grammatical errors that I spotted but other than that great job!!
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