Dear Jaye,
Great job! I really enjoyed your story. The whole story line flowed along very well and I was pleasantly surprised at the end.
You could easily continue this story line on into a much longer adventure story.... you could take us on some fun and surprising adventures. I'd like to hear what the mysterious connection is with the girl in the portrait....maybe a long-lost relative with a fantastic past...
I think you should write some more!
Blessings
Lambkeeper
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