That was beautiful! I loved your rhyming pattern and the way you make the food sound so delicious. I would only suggest that you explain the symbols behind the components of the sundae a little more, but if you have a certain word limit or are using the vagueness as stylizing then I totally understand. Terrific idea and writing!
This work was incredible! I and everyone else can honestly see why you won the "Walk Down Memory Lane" contest since this piece is both factual and opinionative in the best mixture possible. I love how you included learning pieces as well as your own input. My only words of advice would be to be careful with your words since a lot of this could be easily skimmed over due to a little bit of wordiness and run on sentences. It doesn't bother me but I could easily see others not reading it throughly due to that reason. Anyways its a brillant piece and congratulations!
~Keep writing,
Alaina
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