I didn't really understand the title to begin with- but once you read the story, it makes perfect sense!
A gripping adventure, full of suspense and wonderment- which only makes you want to read more.
Not really my type of story, but for any adventure hunters or fantasy lovers- the perfect satisfaction.
In my opinion though- it would be nice if you gave some indication whether or not there will be more to the story- as in even just titling it with "chapter one" etc.
This story is very emotional and sad, and sends a sharp feeling into your chest when you read the most dramatic parts. You can easily tell what it is about and it is very interesting. I would not reccommend this particular story for younger viewers such as under 14 possibly 13. I am a thirteen year old and from my point of view it is a thrilling and dramatic story, worthy of being published in a book. I would just like to point out though, that perhaps you should label it or give it a more distinguished brief of the story because that was not at all what I expected to happen in the story and I do not think it is something younger viewers should be learning. It was a bit old for me too, though I am sensible about it.
Can you please view my profile too? Just type in Creation story, mytyhology, nature, romance/love (those are obviously key words) and that should come up with my first story which you should be able to click into my profile from there. Please give feedback!!! I started my account today.
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