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Rated: E | (3.5)
I liked the christian message behind this, I think you could develop it more. His realization seems to come too quickly. Also, Jeff dials Kayla's number, but no one talks to her. I think you could incorporate a conversation with her that would create more tension in Howard. Good characterization, don't give up on this one!
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