it was an amazing concept! however i feel that there are a few grammatical errors that need to be corrected such as, line 7,line eight, and line 4 needs to be re worded. this was an over all great poem.
i really like your word choice its an altogether amazing poem. i can relate to it because, i too have been through a heart break and have chosen not to open myself up to be hurt the same way or as deeply as i was before. might not be the best way but the pain i felt showed me that no one is gonna look out for my feeling but me.
i can really relate to the emotion in this poem, because it describes how i feel in my senior year of high school. all the time that i have wasted all the classes i should have taken seriously and honestly i wish i could go back and change it all. although it might sound cliche it also reminds me of a failed relationship that i had i messed up and really hurt him and would do anything to go back and fix the things that i did wrong, but i cant no mater how hard i try once things are said and done they cant be changed you will never be able to change the words you choose.
AMAZING IMAGERY!! this poem was very well written, and has alot of deep and well explained emotions. "Nights that once were cold Are now comforting and warm, Because each day is paradise When she's lying in my arms." is my favorite line
It was an amazing poem and i loved the word choice. i could tell that it was coming form a deeper place. i could almost envision a broken heart, or what that person put you through.
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