Your poem was great. it flowed very well. i loved your word choice, it works very well. my facorite line was " The vengence of whip torturing to death with a hateful heart." i would have loved if it was longer, and spaced out into stanzas with some more details. also you had ery good imagery, but i would like to have seen more.
i loved your poem. i t had great imager i could see it happening. and you also have a great word choice. the only thing i would change would be to break it up into stanzas to help the reader process it better. my favorite line was " Integrity is the light shining". overall it was a great poem and loved it.
i love the message of this poem. it alos has great imagery and flows really well. only probblem i had with it is the one line stanza. to fix that and and a few lines about how powerful his. my favorite parft of your poem was, " It's just that sometimes we feel it is; too fast, too soon, unbeliveble, and not fair !"
this poem had wonderful imagery aand flowed verty gracefully. one thing i would change is too add a bettter hook that draws the reader in. the world choice reeally makes the imagery so great i could see it play out. i really liked the last stanza the best, it was like "im a strong independent penguin and i dont neeed to fly."
i thought thus was p0retty amazing. It flowed like a waterfall. wounderful word choice. the only problem i had with it was maybe more of a poem layout. you had ,many comas in woume parts it think that would be easier to read if it was a poem. my favorite part of your samaple was the last stanza paragrah thing.
The poem was pretty snazzy, the only problem I had with it is that I felt like it repeated at the end. your word choice was great, and so was your imagery. i felt like i was watching it happen. "My heart withstood grimace It stood strong against mistrust But it finally fell limp with your brutality--" this was my favorite line.
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