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Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
 My review!


         I look for stories that can make me either mad, sad, glad, enlightened, excited, informed, or in love. Who doesn't love an addicting page turner?

What I liked/Favorite passage:
like
the girl, apple skin left to feel only the fleeting sun
waiting for her apples to find themselves once more.
no letter could end the amount of suffering the little girl goes through
waiting. waiting. waiting. waiting. waiting. waiting while no one cares to find her anymore

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation:Aside from not beginning a sentence with a capital letter, I found no miscues

Summary: around and learn more;
Truly a deeply sad story. Stick
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Review of NATURE  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Feb 22, 2023
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Welcome to my review!


         I love to read stories either that make me mad, turn me sad, get me glad, enlighten me,
inform me, or even puzzle me. Who doesn't love an addicting page-turner?

(I'm not much of a poet, so forgive me if I don't quite get free verse, however when it comes to straight up writing in English, there are certain guidelines which should be adhered. Correct spelling, proper usage of grammar and most importantly, correct timing and location if punctuation.) *Bigsmile*

What I liked/Favorite passage:
The beauty that comes to me
Through nature
Speaks to my soul.

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation: No nits here!

Summary: All in all, a.
fantastic presentation.


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Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome to my review!

Your spot on spelling acumen and proper usage of grammar and correct punctuation is refreshing.

The only possible glitch is likely a matter of preference:Damn commercial.
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Review of Star Drek  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Absolutely hilarious! Nothing better than a farcical comedy. Especially when it's based upon my all time favorite. Star Trek.

Sort of reminds me of "Barbarella."

What a joke. As long as you're alive, there will be no lack of tongue in cheek comedy. Thanks for sharing.

*Bigsmile*
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Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Max, one more time, you've did what you always do. Write with grit, eloquence and realism.

No no nits here and thank goodness for dear old dad!


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Review of A beginning  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
A soul finally accepts the harsh reality of life, but relishes his memories of riding the big wave. Deep stuff.
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Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
OMG! Though I wasn't old enough to buy alcohol, everywhere I landed seemed to be one vermit and creepy-crawly critter infested breeding ground. *Frown*

Over time, I've learned to deal with these things. But that doesn't make them any less disgusting!
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Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I highly enjoyed your poignant piece of well written prose.

My favorite passage: "Come to me again--
on the tide of every tear I shed for you.
This ocean remembers.
It knows you
better than I do now."

Suggestion: When expressing a quick break in thought, use an emdash like this: {emdash} instead of --.

Just trying to help.
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Review of Elysium  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Some pretty spiffy word work, I must say.

My favorite passage: "This vibe so tight, I wear it like armour
Your presence—the charmer"

With no miscues in spelling, nor any glaring grammatical faults, I commend this well crafted piece of poetry. *Bigsmile*
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Review of Longing  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Love. Can't live with it
Can't live with it
Some are swept off their feet, jump off the deep end, sacrificing it all for that thing called love.

I found no spelling miscues or glaring grammatical errors.
Nicely done. *Bigsmile*
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Review of Writing.Com 101  Open in new Window.
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Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I keep it simple, pointing out three or four key bullet points. Proper usage of grammar, correct spelling and clearly punctuated.

Above all is to be encouraging and helpful. Be polite, névêr too critical with suggestions.
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Review of Ideas  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I find that interesting, natural, with little to spare makeup(a touch of lip gloss, lightly applied mascara and blush on women is a whole lot better than caked on, over used anything is unattractive and entirely unnecessary.
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Review of Anger  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Anger going down the mountain side(one word)[just?] like molten lava turning into a knife hurting someone just like that.


An angry storm cloud at the table as an uninvited guest.(This sentence sounds awkward.) Everyone gets angry(period) now. [;?] They start to fight and squabble.


Now everyone is angry(period)(new sentence) a ferocious group of people tread down the street(comma) angrily and start to fight(period)(new sentence) everyone one else is staring at the commotion(comma) not noticing one guy in the corner having an allergic reaction(period) and eventually dying(period) and once the local police turns up to stop the fight, he is long dead.

A suggestion:Try reading your work aloud. See if it sounds right. Using proper grammar makes it easier for the reader.
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Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Time. Can't stop it. Can't slow it down. And you certainly cannot get it back. Ever. In Einstein's world, time and space are all relevant.

"Those who do not remember the past are condemned to repeat it. (George Santayana)

Learn something new each day, then pass it on.

If you truly love what you do, you'll never work a day in your life.
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Review of WRITER'S BLOCK  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
JJ, I too often feel the same way. Too many things running through my head.

I find the best motivation comes from people I've met. Especially women or places I've visited.

Good luck!

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Review of The End  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Scary, yet possibly true stuff. One cannot help but wonder if there's nothing we can do to stop the madness.

Your writing is beautiful and I found only one spelling miscue: the missal[missile] hit the ground.

Overall, good job!
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Review of THE DOVE'S MUSIC  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Kudos on your spelling acumen!

Your cute little story could use a few paragraphs breaks rather than be presented as one long sentence.

Keep writing
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Review of Growing Up  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
There's nothing like the moment you realize that Santa is just another fairy tale; a big 'ol lie.
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Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I know for a fact that speaking at parties or public in general can be intimidating. Especially if you're buzzed.

If you intend to speak, do it with a clear mind and with the conscious that you truly believe what you say.

My favorite passage is:
The awkwardness felt like thick syrup. Time ground to a halt. My mind raced to find something to say. It drew twenty-one blanks, and the best it came up with was “Um.”

I've been there. It sucks!

No grammatical miscues noted.
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Review of Poo  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
"Poo", what it is (s***, crap, dookie.)

Blame it on the dog.
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Review of Do You?  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Congrats on your interesting, yet almost universal prepositions.

Though I do not see any connection between hating food and people. 🤫
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Review of Shine Far  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Short, sweet and clever!

A suggestion;

[With its chilly] early morning sight,
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Review of Ghost Peppers  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Exellent beginning for your story! The killer is demented and quite devious as well.

Your spelling is impeccable and the only possible error I found is: Too bad, you made this [to]? easy.”
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Review of Van Gogh's Shoes  Open in new Window.
Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Bravo! My favorite passage: This muted tone throne I own
A tapestry of pain brutal be sewn
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Review by WB_Radley Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I must say that your word wizardry is quite refreshing!

One suggestion:

a soul that grieves(to grieve?),
For a love that fate could not retrieve.
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