You're poem has a lot of emotion in it, so much so that I feel that you're writing is being choked by it. Yeah maybe you're not over him yet. xD
However, it would be nice if you corrected some of the typos, like "and cannot be surpressed" and "Moving on is harder...". It kinda spoils the mood that you try to set, even if you chalk it up to "poetic license".
Good luck and keep writing!
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