A great piece of writing. Very imaginative and it really sets a scene for a 'Hansel and Gretel' type fantasy land. Couple of minor adaptations I could suggest for your piece like extending your text written in italics for the flashback so the italics finish when the flashback finishes. The second is to adapt the conversation when the 2 characters start running together, the conversation is very in depth for a mood where they are supposed to be running for their lives. Apart from these two points I cannot fault your work.
Great work!
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