Nice. Great use of acronyms. This makes we really consider how the other inhabitants of our planet actually view us. I wish there was more to the story.
This was an excellent start to a story. I want to keep reading and find out more about the Kodar and the "mystery" man. You can tell by the prophecy that someone is likely to come into Kodar's life and change it forever. I see that this is copyrighted. Have you had it published yet? If so I would be interested in the full story.
The writing was good and had no errors as far as I could see. Also the details provided gave the reader(me) a good sense of what you were trying to get across. Keep up the great work!
Good twist for the doctor. Well written and interesting. Has an air of another story I read in the past , but can't remember what it was. However, still original and a good journey.
WELL WRITTEN AND GRIPPING! I couldn't wait to find out where the story was going. By the name alone I could feel something bad on the horizon. Even though this was a short story it would even make a good movie. I read it with my wife and she just looked at me when we finished. I think there was one typo near the begining, but otherwise thtis was a great read.
Well written. I look forward to reading chapter 2. The only thing that threw me was the quick references to the gods of these people. It was a lot of information to take in quickly. I would liked to have had more detail on the gods as to understand their impact on their people. But in the end it was an interesting first chapter. WRITE ON!
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