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Review of What is Love?  Open in new Window.
Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow:) beautiful. I hope I can see an updated version from you but wow 12 years ago...
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hope to hear from you and hope you are still loving on

-kevster


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Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Midnight Cold Calling" is a quirky and amusing short story that blends mundane modern sales tactics with supernatural elements. The narrative follows Joseph, a vampire, who gets an unexpected visit from a persistent door-to-door salesman named Vladimir Benedict in the dead of night. Despite his initial annoyance, Joseph ends up browsing the salesman's catalogue and making purchases, including a much-needed casket and a special collar for his weretiger husband. The story humorously captures the oddity of nocturnal life for supernatural beings while subtly poking fun at the universal experience of dealing with salespeople. The characters' interactions are witty and the concept of tailored products for different supernatural creatures adds a delightful twist.

However, the story concludes somewhat abruptly after Joseph makes his purchases, leaving readers wanting a more definitive or humorous closing exchange between the characters. A stronger ending could further enhance the overall enjoyment of this entertaining tale that seamlessly combines the mundane with the fantastical in a charmingly offbeat way.

Overall good read. Thank you.


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Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

"The Crocodile and The Plover" is a charming and heartwarming tale of an unlikely friendship between two creatures of the wild. Set against the backdrop of a serene riverbank, the story unfolds with vivid imagery and engaging dialogue.

The narrative beautifully captures the symbiotic relationship between the crocodile and the plover, showcasing their unique bond as the plover fearlessly tends to the crocodile's dental hygiene while enjoying the safety of its mouth. This unusual but endearing interaction highlights the importance of cooperation and mutual benefit in nature.

While the story successfully creates a captivating atmosphere and delivers a heartwarming message, there are a few aspects that could be enhanced for an even more immersive experience. For instance, providing more descriptive details about the surroundings and the characters' appearances could enrich the reader's visual experience and deepen their connection to the story.

Additionally, expanding on the emotional depth of the characters and their relationship could add layers of complexity to the narrative, making it more compelling and resonant. Exploring the inner thoughts and feelings of the crocodile and the plover as they interact with each other and navigate their respective roles in the ecosystem could further enrich the storytelling.

Overall, "The Crocodile and The Plover" is a delightful read that leaves a lasting impression, reminding us of the beauty found in the most unexpected places. With a few refinements to enhance descriptive elements and emotional depth, this story has the potential to captivate readers even more profoundly.


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Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
In "Ode to Oscar: Chapter One - Simplicity," we dive into a woman's life intertwined with Oscar's story. The writing flows well, but sometimes it feels like it's going too fast or dragging on. It would be great if the writer could keep a consistent pace throughout.

The main character's thoughts and feelings are clear, but sometimes she repeats herself or goes off on tangents. It would help if the writer trimmed down some of these parts to keep the story focused and engaging.

The relationship between the main character and Oscar is interesting, but it could use more depth. Exploring their interactions and how their connection grows would make the story even more captivating.

Overall, "Ode to Oscar: Chapter One - Simplicity" is a good read, but with some tweaks to pacing, clarity, and character development, it could be even better.

Thanks for the good read!


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Review of Serpent lies...  Open in new Window.
Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
"Blood curdles at night" opens this evocative piece with a sense of primal fear and the struggle against darkness. Through vivid imagery and powerful language, the poem navigates the journey of battling against deception and the yearning for truth. The repetition of "take me back" echoes the longing for a return to innocence and home, juxtaposed against the relentless battle against the night.

The imagery of the moon as a symbol of deception, with its "underbelly of lies," adds depth to the narrative, portraying a world where truth is obscured. The poem's progression towards revelation and the unmasking of deceit resonates with themes of awakening and reclaiming purity.

As the speaker vows to return to "the place of dreams," there's a sense of defiance and resolution, an assertion of the power of truth over falsehood. "Serpent Lies" encapsulates the eternal struggle for clarity and authenticity amidst darkness, offering a compelling journey towards enlightenment and freedom.


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Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
"I Called Him Kicky" is a poignant and haunting narrative that delves into the depths of human suffering, compassion, and the enduring impact of a single life lost. Set against the backdrop of a United Nations-sponsored project in Mali, Africa, the story follows an engineer's desperate attempts to alleviate the suffering of orphaned children amidst the harsh realities of poverty and neglect.

The protagonist, whose insomnia is a testament to his restless conscience, finds solace in his morning routines and clandestine acts of kindness towards the neglected orphans outside the compound walls. Despite facing resistance from guards and bureaucratic indifference, he persists in his mission to bring some semblance of comfort to those in need.

The heart of the story lies in the relationship between the protagonist and a young orphan named Kicky, whose spirited defiance and resilience leave an indelible mark on the engineer's soul. Through Kicky's tragic fate, the narrative explores themes of loss, remembrance, and the profound impact of individual kindness in a world plagued by indifference.

The prose is evocative and raw, capturing the stark realities of life in Mali with unflinching honesty. From the desperation of hungry children to the callousness of authority figures, the author paints a vivid portrait of a society teetering on the brink of despair.

As the protagonist reflects on Kicky's untimely death and the fleeting nature of human existence, the story serves as a powerful reminder of the importance of bearing witness to suffering and standing up against injustice, even in the face of overwhelming odds.

"I Called Him Kicky" is a gut-wrenching yet ultimately hopeful tale that speaks to the resilience of the human spirit and the enduring power of compassion in the face of adversity. It is a testament to the capacity for empathy to transcend barriers of language, culture, and distance, leaving a lasting impact on those fortunate enough to bear witness to its transformative effects.


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Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Title: "Race Through Canterlot"

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"Race Through Canterlot" is a compelling and engaging story that captures the essence of friendship, competition, and self-discovery through the experiences of Scootaloo, Sweetie Belle, and Apple Bloom. The title aptly reflects the central event of the narrative—a thrilling race through the bustling streets of Canterlot—which serves as a backdrop for deeper explorations of the characters' personalities and relationships.

The dynamic between the three main characters is a standout aspect of the story. Each character is distinctively crafted with their own strengths, weaknesses, and motivations, making them relatable and compelling to follow. The interactions between Scootaloo, Sweetie Belle, and Apple Bloom feel authentic and are infused with moments of humor, tension, and camaraderie.

The pacing of the story is well-executed, with moments of intense action balanced by quieter, introspective scenes. This allows for the development of both the plot and the characters, ensuring that readers remain engaged throughout. The descriptive language used to depict the settings and scenes is vivid and immersive, enhancing the reader's experience and bringing the world of Canterlot to life.

Themes of friendship, competition, and self-discovery are expertly woven into the narrative, providing depth and resonance to the story. Through the characters' experiences and interactions, the story explores the complexities of these themes, inviting readers to reflect on their own relationships and aspirations.

Overall, "Race Through Canterlot" is a well-crafted and enjoyable story that offers a compelling blend of adventure, friendship, and personal growth. With its engaging characters, well-paced plot, and thought-provoking themes, it is sure to captivate readers and leave them eagerly anticipating more adventures from Scootaloo, Sweetie Belle, and Apple Bloom.


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Review of Spooky Mission  Open in new Window.
Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
"Spooky Mansion" is a chilling narrative set in the eerie environs of Birmingham's outskirts. The tale revolves around Andrew, a seasoned investigator, and his brave exploration of a notorious mansion rumored to be haunted.

The story unfolds with vivid descriptions of the mansion's Gothic architecture and ominous atmosphere, immediately immersing readers in a world fraught with suspense and danger. The author skillfully sets the stage for the unfolding mystery, painting a haunting picture of the desolate location and its forbidding surroundings.

As Andrew and his faithful manservant Daniel venture into the mansion's dark recesses, tension mounts with each passing moment. The author expertly builds suspense, leading readers on a heart-pounding journey through shadowy corridors and hidden chambers.

The characters are well-developed and engaging, particularly Andrew, whose determination and courage drive the narrative forward. Daniel's unwavering loyalty adds depth to the story, serving as a poignant reminder of the bonds of friendship in the face of adversity.

The plot takes several unexpected twists and turns, keeping readers on the edge of their seats until the very end. From mysterious apparitions to spine-chilling encounters, "Spooky Mansion" delivers plenty of thrills and surprises, making it a must-read for fans of the horror genre.

The writing is atmospheric and evocative, capturing the eerie ambiance of the mansion with vivid imagery and descriptive language. The author's ability to create a sense of foreboding and suspense is truly impressive, drawing readers into the story and holding their attention until the final page.

Overall, "Spooky Mansion" is a captivating tale of mystery, suspense, and supernatural intrigue. With its well-drawn characters, atmospheric setting, and pulse-pounding plot, it's sure to delight readers looking for a spine-tingling thrill ride.


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Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
"Ostensibly Audacious" is a stirring declaration of resilience and defiance in the face of adversity. The title itself hints at a bold and unapologetic stance, which is reflected throughout the passage.

The speaker expresses a steadfast commitment to staying true to themselves despite encountering disapproval and judgment from others. The repetition of the phrase "I will remain ostensibly audacious" reinforces their unwavering resolve and determination to defy societal norms and expectations.

Throughout the passage, there is a sense of empowerment and self-assertion as the speaker refuses to be defined or constrained by the opinions of others. Instead, they choose to embrace their individuality and continue to express themselves authentically, even in the face of criticism and adversity.

The imagery of "heels dug in into trenches" and being "pushed into the mud" evokes a sense of struggle and resilience, highlighting the challenges faced by the speaker on their journey to assert their identity and voice.

Overall, "Ostensibly Audacious" is a powerful and inspiring affirmation of self-confidence and empowerment. It serves as a reminder to embrace one's authenticity and to stand tall in the face of opposition, reaffirming the importance of staying true to oneself no matter the obstacles encountered along the way.


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Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
"I Know This is Late But I Made a Mistake" is a deeply emotional and introspective passage that resonates with authenticity and raw honesty. The speaker's admission of fault and regret is palpable, evoking a sense of empathy and understanding from the reader.

The passage captures the weight of past decisions and their lingering impact on both the speaker and the recipient. Despite the passage of time, the emotions expressed remain vivid and poignant, underscoring the enduring significance of the relationship.

The speaker's reflection on their actions and the consequences thereof adds layers of complexity to the narrative, revealing the internal struggles and conflicting desires that contributed to their decision-making process. The imagery of stained jackets, memories folded neatly in drawers, and the ache of unshared experiences paints a vivid picture of longing and remorse.

Overall, "I Know This is Late But I Made a Mistake" is a beautifully crafted exploration of love, loss, and the complexities of human relationships. Its emotional depth and heartfelt sincerity make it a poignant and memorable read, leaving a lasting impact on the reader.


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Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
"A Question Remains" is a poignant and emotionally charged poem that delves into the complexities of love, loss, and longing. Through evocative imagery and raw emotion, the poem explores the aftermath of a romantic encounter, where the protagonist grapples with the haunting absence of their lover.

The opening lines immediately draw the reader into the speaker's world of yearning, as they lament the absence of their lover's touch. The juxtaposition of desire and sorrow is palpable, as the speaker reflects on the fleeting ecstasy of their encounter, now tainted by solitude and longing.

The central question that echoes throughout the poem adds a layer of depth and introspection, as the speaker wrestles with uncertainty and longing. This question serves as a poignant reminder of the unresolved emotions lingering in the wake of their parting, symbolizing the lingering ache of unanswered longing.

The imagery of clutching damp sheets and trembling hearts conveys a sense of physical and emotional turmoil, while the subtle repetition of phrases like "My bliss decays in tears" underscores the pervasive sense of loss and disillusionment.

Overall, "A Question Remains" is a beautifully crafted exploration of love's complexities and the lingering ache of unanswered questions. The poem's evocative language and raw emotion make it a compelling and deeply resonant read.


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Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Title: "Dining and Dashing"

Your story captures a memorable dining experience driven not by the food, but by the chaotic circumstances and ensuing escapade of Lena and Wendell fleeing the restaurant without paying. Here's a review of your piece:

1. **Engaging Narrative:** The narrative draws readers in with its comedic and suspenseful elements. From the disastrous dining experience to the daring escape, each moment is described in a way that keeps the reader entertained and eager to see how the situation unfolds.

2. **Character Dynamics:** Lena and Wendell's dynamic is well-developed, with their differing personalities and reactions adding depth to the story. Lena's amusement and Wendell's adventurous spirit shine through as they navigate the absurdity of the situation together.

3. **Descriptive Language:** Your use of descriptive language effectively paints a vivid picture of the restaurant and its shortcomings, from the rude wait staff to the questionable food quality. The details enhance the reader's immersion in the story and contribute to its humor.

4. **Moral Complexity:** Despite the lighthearted tone, the story raises moral questions about the ethics of dining and dashing. Lena and Wendell's justification for their actions adds complexity to their characters and invites readers to consider the consequences of their choices.

5. **Closure and Reflection:** The story comes full circle with Lena reflecting on the incident and its lasting impact on their relationship. The closing lines provide a sense of closure while also leaving room for continued reflection and discussion.

Overall, "Dining and Dashing" is a well-crafted tale that balances humor, suspense, and moral contemplation. Your skillful storytelling and engaging characters make for an entertaining read that leaves readers pondering the complexities of human behavior and the unexpected twists of fate. Keep up the great work!


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Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Your piece delves into the juxtaposition between the idealized righteousness of society and the harsh reality of its flaws, particularly regarding violence and substance abuse. Here's a review of your poem:

Evocative Imagery: The imagery in your poem is vivid and powerful, drawing the reader into the scene of tragedy and societal reflection. Phrases like "bloody, despicable wrath" and "grotesque harms" paint a stark picture of the aftermath of violence, while descriptions of "mesmerizing, destabilizing substance" evoke the allure and danger of addiction.

Layered Themes: You explore several themes throughout the poem, including the contrast between societal ideals and harsh realities, the consequences of violence and substance abuse, and the failure of enforcement and societal norms to prevent tragedy. These themes add depth and complexity to the narrative, prompting readers to consider the multifaceted nature of societal issues.

Social Commentary: Your poem serves as a poignant social commentary on the cycle of violence and substance abuse perpetuated by societal norms and inadequate enforcement of laws. By highlighting the voices of victims and the community's response to tragedy, you underscore the need for change and greater awareness of these issues.

Effective Language: The language in your poem is eloquent and impactful, conveying a sense of urgency and despair. The use of alliteration and poetic devices enhances the rhythm and flow of the

overall its a thought-provoking and emotionally resonant exploration of societal issues and their consequences. Your use of evocative imagery, layered themes, and effective language creates a compelling narrative that prompts readers to reflect on the complexities of the human condition and the need for societal change. Keep up the great work!


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Review of Superstar  Open in new Window.
Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Title: "Superstar"

Your poem captures the struggles and vulnerabilities of a public figure, juxtaposing the external perception of fame with the internal turmoil and desire for respect and understanding. Here's a review of your piece:

1. **Effective Portrayal of Emotion:** The poem effectively conveys the emotional journey of the protagonist, highlighting the contrast between the public image of a "superstar" and the private struggles they face. The portrayal of pain masked by a smile and the desire for respect amidst criticism resonates with empathy and authenticity.

2. *Strong Imagery:* Your use of vivid imagery, such as "pouring her life into song" and "all eyes on her," creates a palpable sense of pressure and scrutiny surrounding the protagonist's life. These images help to immerse the reader in the experience of living under constant observation and judgment

3. **Universal Themes:* The themes of longing for acceptance, grappling with criticism, and yearning for genuine connection are universal and relatable. By humanizing the protagonist and emphasizing their shared humanity with the reader, the poem invites empathy and understanding.

4.Engaging Structure: The repetition of the phrase "she is human like me and you" reinforces the central message of empathy and solidarity, anchoring the poem and providing a sense of unity amidst the portrayal of isolation and scrutiny.

Overall, "Superstar" is a poignant exploration of the complexities of fame and the universal longing for acceptance and understanding. Your skillful use of emotion, imagery, and structure creates a compelling narrative that resonates with authenticity and empathy. Keep up the excellent work!


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Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Your poem beautifully captures the essence of nature in motion, painting a vivid picture of a garden brought to life by the wind. Here are some specific points I appreciated:

1. **Effective Repetition:** The repetition of the phrase "As the wind blows through my garden" creates a rhythmic flow throughout the poem, emphasizing the continuous movement and interaction between the wind and the garden elements. This repetition also serves to reinforce the central theme of the poem.

2. **Sensory Imagery:** Your use of sensory details, such as the trees waving hello, the flowers bending to smell the grass, and the soil learning to fly, engages the reader's senses and evokes a strong visual and tactile experience. This imagery adds depth and realism to the scene, allowing readers to immerse themselves in the garden setting.

3. **Theme of Vitality:** The concluding line, "This garden is alive," effectively encapsulates the overarching theme of the poem — the vitality and liveliness of nature. By personifying the garden and portraying it as a living entity, you convey a sense of interconnectedness between all living things and the natural world.

Overall, your poem effectively captures the beauty and dynamism of nature, inviting readers to appreciate the subtle wonders of the garden. Your use of repetition, sensory imagery, and thematic depth contribute to a compelling and evocative piece of writing. Keep up the great work!


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Review of Somehow  Open in new Window.
Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
The poem "Somehow" captivates with its poignant reflection on the journey through love and life, and I find its flow and structure particularly enchanting. Each stanza seamlessly transitions into the next, drawing the reader deeper into the speaker's introspective narrative. The repetition of the phrase "And I knew we'd meet somehow" acts as a rhythmic anchor, lending a sense of continuity and inevitability to the evolving story.

I appreciate the simplicity of the language used, which allows the emotions conveyed to shine through with clarity and sincerity. The use of the metaphor of toys to represent different stages of emotional growth adds depth to the poem, inviting readers to reflect on their own experiences of love and maturation.

Furthermore, the poem's exploration of vulnerability, heartbreak, and ultimately, hope, resonates on a deeply human level. It reminds us of the cyclical nature of life and love, where each experience, whether joyful or painful, contributes to our growth and understanding.

Overall, "Somehow" is a beautifully crafted piece that skillfully navigates the complexities of the human heart. Its evocative imagery, seamless flow, and heartfelt sentiment make it a truly captivating read, leaving a lasting impression on the reader's mind and heart.


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Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
If you thought football was just a game, think again. "Superbowl 58" transcends the realm of sport and plunges you into a whirlwind of emotions, chaos, and sheer madness. From the very first kickoff, this spectacle grabs you by the throat and refuses to let go until the final whistle blows.

The passage reads like a fever dream, with vivid descriptions and a narrative that twists and turns like a winding road. The author captures the intensity of the game, painting a picture of a family consumed by their love for the sport. From Aunt Patty's ominous chili to Uncle Barry's chain-smoking despair, each character adds to the frenetic energy of the scene.

But it's not just about the game itself; it's about the human drama unfolding before our eyes. Coach Reid's calculated madness, Mahomes' superhuman feats, and Fred's delusional referee antics all add layers of complexity to the story. It's a tale of hope and despair, of triumph and heartbreak, all wrapped up in the chaos of Superbowl Sunday.

The writing is visceral and raw, pulling you into the action and making you feel every tackle, every fumble, and every touchdown. You can practically taste the sweat and hear the roar of the crowd as the game reaches its climax.

And just when you think you can't take any more, the narrative takes another twist, catapulting you into a frenzy of emotion. It's a wild ride from start to finish, leaving you breathless and exhilarated by the final whistle.

In the end, "Superbowl 58" is more than just a game; it's an experience. It's a testament to the power of sport to unite and divide, to inspire and devastate. And above all, it's a reminder that sometimes, the most memorable moments come from the most unexpected places.


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Review of Nearly An Angel  Open in new Window.
Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
In "Nearly an Angel," the poet navigates the complexities of parenthood with heartfelt honesty and poignant reflection. The juxtaposition of the child's evolving personality—sometimes mirroring the mother's, sometimes the father's—captures the tender balance between innocence and maturity. Through vivid imagery and raw emotion, the poet expresses longing and love, underscoring the bittersweet reality of being separated from their child on her ninth birthday. Despite the physical distance, the poem resonates with the universal experience of parental devotion and gratitude, affirming the enduring bond between parent and child.

OVERALL A GREAT READ!


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Review of Brown Eyes  Open in new Window.
Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
"Brown Eyes" is a beautiful poem that tells a story about love and tough choices. Imagine being drawn to someone with brown eyes while having to leave behind another person with blue eyes. The poet describes the deep feelings and conflicts involved in making such a decision. It's like a love story where the gaze of brown eyes becomes special, and the poem makes you think about the complexities of love and how it can pull you in different directions. It's similar to my poem "Where Dreams Reside," which talks about the fascination with grey eyes. Both poems explore the intense emotions connected to someone's gaze. overall it's a beautiful Poem. my one tip is to try to spread out the use of your "main words" and try to find similar-sounding words or synonyms. best of luck to you! thanks for the read!

-Kevin


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Review of I am as we are  Open in new Window.
Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This powerful and introspective poem beautifully explores the multifaceted nature of the speaker, who identifies as a High Priestess of Hecate. The confident assertion of her identity as a guide, protector, and balance between light and dark showcases a deep understanding of her role and purpose. The imagery of walking between worlds and seeing the future on numerous timelines adds a mystical and transcendent quality to the poem.

The speaker's declaration of fearlessness in the face of curses, immortality, and the ability to turn bones back to life conveys a sense of empowerment and mastery over her gifts. The acknowledgment of both light and dark as inherent aspects of existence, without moral judgment, reflects a mature understanding of the complexities of life and nature.

The call to break generational trauma and embrace continual learning resonates with themes of growth and self-discovery. The poem encourages self-trust, emphasizing the importance of inner truth and the battle to align oneself with one's true path. The concluding phrase, "See you on the other side," adds a mysterious and anticipatory element, leaving the reader with a sense of intrigue and connection to a greater spiritual journey.


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Review of Animal Help  Open in new Window.
Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Your story is heartwarming and carries a beautiful message of compassion and care for nature's creatures. The narrative flows smoothly, and the incorporation of Bible verses adds a deeper layer to the theme of responsible stewardship over the animal kingdom. Janet's act of rescuing and nurturing the injured wolf pup reflects the idea of humans coexisting with and helping other beings, aligning with the intended purpose described in Genesis. The connection between the biblical verses and Janet's actions creates a poignant harmony, emphasizing the importance of kindness and responsibility towards the earth and its inhabitants. Overall, it's a touching story with a positive and uplifting message.


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Review of MY LOVE FOR YOU  Open in new Window.
Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
"Your poem is absolutely beautiful! The way you weave words together to express love, peace, and strength is truly captivating. I appreciate the gentle and soothing tone, reminiscent of my own writing style. The imagery you create with each verse paints a vivid picture of love's warmth and reassurance. Keep up the fantastic work, and I look forward to reading more of your poetry!


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Review of Volunteering 101  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
"Volunteering 101" provides practical insights into the world of volunteering, balancing the rewarding aspects with the potential frustrations. The passage emphasizes the importance of setting boundaries by learning to say 'no' without the need for justification, asserting that volunteers have a life beyond their commitments. Additionally, it offers valuable advice on taking charge when necessary and navigating diverse ideas without passing immediate judgment. The tone is straightforward and appreciative, acknowledging the challenges while expressing gratitude for those willing to embrace the volunteering journey. Overall, it serves as a helpful guide for prospective volunteers.


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Review of Volunteering 101  Open in new Window.
Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
"Volunteering 101" provides practical insights into the world of volunteering, balancing the rewarding aspects with the potential frustrations. The passage emphasizes the importance of setting boundaries by learning to say 'no' without the need for justification, asserting that volunteers have a life beyond their commitments. Additionally, it offers valuable advice on taking charge when necessary and navigating diverse ideas without passing immediate judgment. The tone is straightforward and appreciative, acknowledging the challenges while expressing gratitude for those willing to embrace the volunteering journey. Overall, it serves as a helpful guide for prospective volunteers.
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Review of Sanctuary  Open in new Window.
Review by Kevster Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Sanctuary captures the protagonist's struggle to embrace a new home on a distant planet, emphasizing the stark contrasts between Earth and "New Earth." The narrative effectively conveys the character's discontent and the challenges of adjusting to an alien environment. The meticulous details about the unusual features of the new world create a vivid atmosphere. The airlock process adds a layer of complexity, emphasizing the inherent difficulties of adapting to an unfamiliar place. The passage successfully sets the stage for a potential conflict between personal preferences and the necessity of finding a new home for humanity. Overall, it engages readers in the character's emotional journey while introducing the intriguing concept of colonization and survival on an alien planet.


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