I found this relatively well-written, with a satisfying conclusion. Overall, a good read. I did find the amount of quotation marks a bit jarring, the narrative would be smoother with a few less. Of course, the protagonist is a writer, so I suppose we should be glad they aren’t plagiarizing that lovely old lady’s words.
This is why you never use common words in your summoning name! Forever getting pulled away from your dinner by rude idiots who don’t even want to make a deal, ugh.
I enjoyed this little story, and the ending was excellent. Thanks for sharing it!
I can't say that I enjoyed reading this, because, well, it's what we're all living. But it's extremely well written. The line about the Kool-Aid got me right in my feelings, envisioning sick children. Really good job on this.
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