The comparison of the clown throughout the piece and in the last line is a good way to describe love. Also the repetition of "I" adds a pretty good personal effect. I like it.
The rhyming scheme in this is pretty impressive. The AABBCCDD keeps the readers attention easily. Your use of onomatopoeia in the first word opens it up straight away making me want to read more. The structure of five stanzas with four lines each makes it easier to read and finishing it off with a final stanza of one and a half line where the end line begins half way shows a good writer and is good techniques.
I like how well written this is. As an animal person who has recently lost a pet due to euthanasia, it speaks loudly to me. It fits perfectly to the feel of holding a pet as it takes its last breath and your heart breaks. I love it, well done!
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