I like this poem very much. I am not a poet.. although I enjoy writing and reading them. I am trying to learn more about the rules (if there are any) to poetry. This repetitive poem is a nice touch. I have one, which I now have the courage to post after reading yours... Maybe you can review it for me?
Your poem has a very down to earth feel to it, It is inviting and connects with the average person. It made me start to envision your grandma smiling in her garden. LOL
Interesting story Steve. The title too seems very fitting. Lost...
I am not an editor, just an average reader.
I like how you start with the action rising. It kept me very interested and reading... very sweet story. It had a sad hint to it, but the ending was just right, I was relieved that he "knew" he would be ok.
Thanks for a great story!
On a diffrent note, I would suggest though that you avoid using contractions [they’d, i'd etc] unless it is dialogue.
:) good luck with the contest
I love it love it! Very simple very nice.
I am not a poet, and don't know all the rules of poetry, but from a readers perspective: it makes sense, flows easily and is simply beautiful.
Does it matter that it isn't very long? What are the rules on that?
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