This was mine- "Aiden! Are you ready?" you mother calls from the hall, "you have to be at Walmart in three hours, and you still haven't picked up the Cheesecake! Hurry up! We're gonna be late!"
Without another thought, you scarf down your breakfast of Pasta and MIlkshake and head for the door. As you catch yourself in the mirror, you notice how Rough you look.
Oh well! you think to yourself, No time to worry about it now! Besides, I look as As Fat As A Cat!
In the blink of an eye, your behind the wheel of your 1998 Porsche jamming to Ivory Wine. Zooming 745 MPH down the road, you pass by the Cheesecake shop. "F U!!" you scream as you do a U-turn and almost run over some Toilet Seats who are Running in the road.
After some arguing with the big Slippery guy named Darren, you pick up the Cheesecake, get in the car, and head for Walmart.
Upon arriving, Maire and Bella, the bridesmaids, are wearing matching Cat Woman costumes. They are singing 'Im Sexy and I Know It' and reek of Vodka and Pizza. You walk by pretending you've never seen them before and desperately search for Tyko, your soon-to-be mate-for-life. (You realize that it's bad luck to see each other before the wedding, but at this point you just don't care anymore)
Finding Tyko naked except for a Basball hat, high off something other then life, you call the whole thing off and decide a Fork named Luna would be better company.
I just have to say at the beggining I got a little confused but other than that this story is simply amazing. And I hope you add more chapters soon. I love how you detail her surroundings and her journey to where she meets Alec. I love how you decribe the way she looks and how the butterfly looks too.
I love this story! Will you be adding more any time soon?? I hope you do. I enjoyed reading this story. It very different than other storys I have read.
The story could of had a little more talking but other than that it was an amazing story. I really enjoyed reading this. I like the storyline. And how you described how the character where thinking and how they felt. You did a great job and I hope to read more of your work.
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