This made me laugh. At first, I didn't see the last line and I was like What?! But I got it and I thought it was good. The story definately tricked me.
Ally, I love you (: and this poem is great. You use good word choices and grammar. Maybe this is realistic, or maybe not. That doesn't matter, theres still a good story behind it.
This was probably the best poem I've read all day. I can relate to it so much. I miss my mom. Even though it has some grammar problems, it's still really good, and I think a lot of people can relate to it.
Even though I have blue eyes, I liked it. I agree green eyes are pretty, and the last line was super cute. I don't like the rhyme, but overall it's good.
I liked how you worded this poem. You never really said who you were talking about, maybe God? I feel like whoever you're talking about, your intimidated by? Or maybe you're just nervous about meeting them. Your vocabulary was really good and your grammer was too. The mood was kind of dark and intimidating.
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