Good points it is well written and I can truly see the emotion that you are feeling it is tangible. However it does not seem to flow right some of the lines need to be re-written to give make it feel more like a poem. For instance "You and I had a special bond, a bond that not every one understands or are blessed to have." I would re-write this "You and I had a special bond. that only we seemed to understand and few others blessed to have." To note the beginning of it could be its on line it can sand alone allowing for a even greater flow. As you can see by switching a few words and altering slightly it gives it a more poetic feel. Like I said this is not bad I really enjoyed it. It is well written and the emotion is tangible which is the base of any great poem I am not saying you have to do what I wrote it was to as a example. Keep it up
I don't really like dark poems or super surreal poetry but this I found well written and I was able to read it all the way through. Yet I do see some ways to improve this it seems less in the poetic form and more in place of a short story. The reason I say this is the emotion that you are trying to convey is has few similes and that is how we make the emotion take a true form so that it is tangible to our reader. However it is still a fine piece of written work and it was a pleaser to read it.
It is very nice of the few poems I have read on here it contains great emotion and similes but it does not flow right. It starts of strong than it becomes harder to follow towards the end like in the second to last stanza "he her true love and eyes" it just does not belong it is confusing and seems out of place. Yet as I said earlier it is one the better poems I have read on here because I can picture this in my mind just would recommend some revision.
I thank you have a great start. I think the protagonist should have a more eye catching introduction not saying what you have is bad but from the readers perspective I am not as griped by it. In the end boss it will be good great lay out and a interesting story.
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