Overall, a fantastic short story. I love horror stories, and turning a fun house into haunted house is definitely an effective way to scare your readers. All those innocent implements can be very sinister when put in a different context. You also did a wonderful job of capturing the teenage spirit. Your characters are so real. The only criticism I have is that I believe you could've put a little more details into it, especially the scary parts to raise the tension.
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