I will be reviewing your piece "T.M.I. (Too Much Information)" . Please remember that this comes to you as a reader would see your work. I have only my opinion to offer.
Overall Impression: This is a great flash fiction! The ending was definitely a surprise. Those two poor employees! It was suspenseful and satisfying.
Strengths: I could just picture these two bungling burglars making their way through the office. You did a really good job of setting the scene with so few words.
Suggestions: I wouldn't change a thing! Except, maybe a longer version! How did he get rid of the bodies? Did he decorate his office to cover what they were really there to do? Oh...I just want to know!
Keep up the great work! I'm looking forward to reading more of your writing.
Keltic
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as a part of the Paper Doll Gang Reviewer's Group. Please remember that this comes to you as a reader would see your work. I have only my opinion to offer.
Overall Impression: I really enjoyed this Flash Fiction. You found a very intriguing way to use the prompt words. The nightmare feel really comes through in your details. This can be a challenge with only 300 words at your disposal. You did a great job with the word limitation.
I particularly liked: The ending had me laughing. Great use of humor to tie up the story.
Keep up the great work! I'm looking forward to reading more of your writing.
Stargazing (E) Who knows what space holds... #1548680 by csd
as a part of the Paper Doll Gang Reviewer's Group. Please remember that this comes to you as a reader would see your work. I have only my opinion to offer.
Overall Impression: I love the twist at the end. You did a good job of making this piece interesting with so few words to use.
Strengths: The dialog between father and son established the story very quickly.
I particularly liked: Again, the twist on the end was great. I started out reading it assuming it was from our viewpoint - not another planet.
Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling: No issued noted.
Suggestions: None - it was a really good story with only 55 words to use.
Keep up the great work! I'm looking forward to reading more of your writing. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
I really enjoyed reading this piece. The imagery and emotion were excellent - especially with the limited amount of words that you had to work with. The ending was a complete surprise to me and made the story even more poignant. It left me wanting to know more about what happened to Sandra and who was Jenny? An enjoyable flash fiction!
I really enjoyed reading this. There are some nice touches of humor. I found myself wondering how in the world a dragon ends up with the name of Fluffy! I would have loved more Fluffy stories or details about the great escape and rescue. It also left me wondering what new exotic pet you would end up with next.
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I will be reviewing your piece "
Overall Impression: This is a great flash fiction! The ending was definitely a surprise. Those two poor employees! It was suspenseful and satisfying. 
Strengths: I could just picture these two bungling burglars making their way through the office. You did a really good job of setting the scene with so few words.
Suggestions: I wouldn't change a thing! Except, maybe a longer version! How did he get rid of the bodies? Did he decorate his office to cover what they were really there to do? Oh...I just want to know! 
I particularly liked: The ending had me laughing. Great use of humor to tie up the story. 
Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling: No issued noted.