I love how you've worded this! The flow is simply gorgeous, and your rhyming scheme is impeccable. I can feel your emotions rise up off of the page and almost take a life of their own! Obviously this poem comes from the deep reccesses of your heart and it just compeletes your work here. Good job!
Victoria,
I think this is truly a unique piece and I love the way you convey your emotions through it, and explain the situation to a passing reader while still sending a message to the one this is entitled to. You do have a typo, however. In the second line after the second If only you knew... you misspelled night with noght.
I also like your tone of optimism.
Always,
Kayenna
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