Your use of punctuation is excellent, as is your dialogue. Scenes are nicely described but a little more detail about WHERE he is would be good. Unless you intended to make it seem like there is some day labor job of sitting on the hood of a car. Voice is consistently first person and it's rather nice that you didn't identify the narrator. The lack of anyone having a name sort of gives it the flavor of a dream, or some kind of unreality. I can only assume that your point is the mind-numbing boredom that go with some jobs. Excellent use of senses to depict characters; the scents, sounds and tactiles were nicely depicted. Overall, good job! Easy to read.
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