nice imagery and i like how you used the seasons to tell a love story... excellent use of an extended metaphor... one suggestion -- i would take some of the weaker words (ie landscape) and try to work on replacing them w/ stronger images... imagery is key imho, especially in such an image driven lyric poem like this. you're definitely on the right track though, im very impressed. very evocative and you delineate between the seasons excellently. If you just played with more unique and interesting imagery and i'd give it a five. either way it's a great poem. excellent work my dear. definitely a cut above the avg nature poem.
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