I enjoyed this. It reminded me of leaving my daughter at college for the first time. It conveys the pride and hopes you have for him and I love the reference to him being the one thing you've done that was great. You've captured pride and the hopes and dreams you have for him and still are amazed at how lucky you are.
I love this! Very well written and engaging, I was sure it was about dogs, loved the twist at the end. I loved the reference to them being twins but complete opposites. Very clever and entertaining.
Wow! Great story idea! I too have often thought how "over-connected" we all seem to be today, what a great view of that very thing! I liked your characters, just enough depth to keep them interesting without telling the reader too much. I would have loved to read this as a full length novel - the scene at the neighbors house alone could have been expanded to at least two or three chapters. Thanks for allowing feedback, keep writing!
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