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Rated: E | (3.0)
This is a lovely piece but it feels as though you focused more on rhyme than flow. One or two parts seem a little awkward like you weren't quite sure where you were taking it, but maybe that's just me. You have a lot of potential but try to get to know your story a little better. Imagine your writing is a child in need of nurturing and be sure to never give up. Happy writing!
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