A wonderful story, which had me engrossed right up to the end - which of course left a lot of questions, but I'm sure you will be updating it soon, right?
I noticed a few punctuation errors, but nothing too distracting and you may want to consider making sure that there is a space between the paragraphs to make it easier on the eyes, but other than that you've done a remarkable job in telling us Julianna's story.
The accents are a charming addition and lends authenticity to the characters. And I loved how you portrayed a teenage girl who had grown up in a family of males and how her reactions to each brother differs depending on their personality.
Well done.
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