I enjoyed reading your story. As a now senior citizen living outside the US, it was refreshing to read it from the aspect of what an ex-college student might experience, for instance Beth doing the initiating in this relationship. The story was technically excellent - everything was logical and error-free. It was coherent. Sometimes, like in the part when the swing set arrives, I broke down laughing. The only thing I would criticize in this story is the detail. I got bogged down in all the detail. I think the story dragged on for too long and could have made its point in half the words. A question from someone who's been away from the scene for a long time: would a college grad be likely to rent this sort of apartment?
All in all, a well-written, entertaining story!
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