I found one mistake in the story. She spent 5 dollars and a lunch allowance I believe and I would of been a lot worried if I was her. The right thing would be to make her worried a little and than she says she is going to get her nightly shower and than say loudly but not too loudly to stay put until after her shower.
This story was great and I am glad it ended with a happy ending but now since you asked the questions about the rock than now I am curious. I give this story a 4.5 mainly because of the confusing part but really good story. So glad for the happy ending because I put my name in it and a name that first got put in my head for a friend.
Great story. I wish I had a pet slime girl. That will be great if I had a pet slime girl. I could just stay in her tummy for ever until I get bored than i'll do something else with her like some how tell her to digest bad humans that really deserved it or something. That would be great.
I love the story but I don't like gay guys, I like lesbian guys and gay girls. Add more options at beginning saying your gender than what type of gender of party. If you make that happen with stories than i'll give 25 more GPs or more and 5 star rating.
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