I found one mistake in the story. She spent 5 dollars and a lunch allowance I believe and I would of been a lot worried if I was her. The right thing would be to make her worried a little and than she says she is going to get her nightly shower and than say loudly but not too loudly to stay put until after her shower.
This story was great and I am glad it ended with a happy ending but now since you asked the questions about the rock than now I am curious. I give this story a 4.5 mainly because of the confusing part but really good story. So glad for the happy ending because I put my name in it and a name that first got put in my head for a friend.
Great story. I wish I had a pet slime girl. That will be great if I had a pet slime girl. I could just stay in her tummy for ever until I get bored than i'll do something else with her like some how tell her to digest bad humans that really deserved it or something. That would be great.
I love the story but I don't like gay guys, I like lesbian guys and gay girls. Add more options at beginning saying your gender than what type of gender of party. If you make that happen with stories than i'll give 25 more GPs or more and 5 star rating.
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/jonathanpecany
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.11 seconds at 10:12pm on Nov 07, 2024 via server WEBX2.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
My review has been submitted for consideration in "