Hello, I enjoyed reading your poem. I clearly expresses your feeling and it is easy to relate. I know your reader will become engaged as you words cause the reader to continue reading. You writing caused me to feel your joyful spirit and feeling of accomplishment. I hope you continue to write and I would love to read more of your work. Good work and "Write On!"
Hello, I loved reading your work. Adonai will never leave or forsake you. After all, He loves you and you are His child. I love the way you kept my attention from the first word to the very last one. It is like a piece of music that crescendos and your words musically increase the mood of your writing. I was able to relate to your writing and it produce a renewal of my faith. I believe you readers will also be able to relate to this piece. Your writing is inspirational and motivational, I believe it will give readers the inspiration to look at their lives and see all the places that God has been there working in their lives. Good Job and "Write On!"
Hello, this is a great piece of work. I can certainly feel the pain, emotion, and strength you have put into words. I know other readers will experience the same. I like the way that keep your reader's attention from the first line to the last line. Your lines are very lyrical and though I don't write poetry myself, I love to read it. You do a great job bringing your reader in, I am confident that they enjoy and relate to your work. Good Job and "Write On!"
Hello, your work is absolutely marvelous. I enjoy reading poetry and my daughters both love puppies, so I can relate. I know that your readers will be able to relate whether they are pet lovers or not. You have a way about your words, you paint a wonderful picture with your words. It is easy to experience your emotions and you illustrate each scene in a manner that is easy to experience. Good job and "Write On!"
Hello, I certainly can relate to your poem. I enjoyed reading your work and I feel like your readers will also be able to relate. You write about the human condition and you paint a great portrait with your words. I like the way you openly speak of your thoughts as they relate to the emotional position of the writer. I like that you did not waste time on words but wrote exactly what was in your heart, and it is apparent. Good job and "Write On!"
Blessings,
J.P. Ruiz
www.authorjpruiz.com
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I look forward to reading more of your work in the near future.
Hello, this is such a great read. I enjoyed reading your work and it testifies so true to God's nature. He is our Heavenly Father and you are right, He does not place us in bad situations - we a pretty good at doing that ourselves. He is the one that will never forsake us and He will walk us through those hard situations. I am so happy that you are here at this community, you words are so inspiring. I will be reading more of your work soon and I pray God provides you with the desires of your heart. I like the way you paint such a beautiful portrait of our Heavenly Father, you remain so true to His heart. Our God is a God of love and you describe that so clearly in your writing. God Bless you and "Write On!"
Hello, I enjoyed reading your work and I can't wait to read what comes next. You have a great beginning and I like the way you set a mood as you paint each scene with your words. You have a great style about your work and the only thing I could recommend would be to expand your scene by tuning in on the other senses, like how she felt, what she heard, saw, smelled if possible (that's just me). I like the way you keep your reader's attention from the first line to the last. You have great skill in your art. Good work and Write On!
Hello, I loved reading your poetry. It is so inspiring and spiritual, not religious. I am a big fan of poetry but even a bigger fan of Jesus. Your work is very lyrical and I like the way that you take your reader from the first line to the last line, painting a beautiful picture of our savior. I believe you will connect with your readers in a very special way. I hope to read more of your work soon. It is great to read something that has so much meaning. Great work and Write On!
Hello, your story was an interesting reading piece. I believe you have a great start to expand upon. This is an important story that could teach important parenting techniques or a great fictional piece about what struggles the children endure as they grow up and the consequences they had to face. One thing about writing, when you are comparing between a set of two characters and your first set is called number one (be sure to spell out any numbers under one hundred and you can use digits for any number over that) be sure that the second set is called number two. If you use couple A then the second set would be couple B. Other than that I really enjoyed reading your work and I hope to read more of your work soon. Good job. Be encouraged and Write On!
Hello, I want you to know that I enjoyed reading your work. I understand you have a disability, I am also 100% disabled but I find writing to be very liberating. There is freedom in words and this gives us an opportunity to be who ever we want to be. You have a great work with this piece, you just need to complete your thought. Is this a spiritual piece about God or Jesus, or is it about someone else. You were very descriptive in your words and I believe your readers will be able to understand your point. Keep up the good work and Write On!
Hello, I enjoyed reading your poetry. It is awesome the way you paint a beautiful illustration of true love. I know your reader will be able to connect with your heart felt words, it would be easy for someone to take your work and use it to portray their situation. I say that because I am a veteran of the Gulf War and I know what it is like to be separated from the ones that you love. I certainly connected with your words. Good Job and Write On!
Hello, I am a big fan of poetry, though I don't write any myself. I enjoyed reading your work and I like the way you take your reader on a journey from the first line to the end. Good description and it is good the way you use your worlds to paint the wonderful picture of love. You kept it short and sweet and did not fill your work with unnecessary words. I have noticed that some people do that in order to make themselves sound smarter. Good work, and I hope to read more of your work soon.
I enjoyed reading your poetry. I like the way your take your reader from the first line and illustrate your thoughts, emotions, and experiences. It is not easy to do, especially when you are you dealing with thoughts and not clean cut actions. You seem to take your reader on an adventure and I am sure most readers will be ready to take that flight with you. Great illustration in your words and I believe your style worked wonderfully. I look forward to reading some more of your work. Good job and Write On.
Hello, I enjoyed reading your poem. I am a short story writer, I write children's book, and I am currently working on a non-fiction Christian book for adults and young adults. I have great respect for poetry and wish to someday become proficient at it. I must say that I had somewhat of a difficult task remaining in the main idea of your writing, but I think that was just me. You do paint a wonderful portrait of your main idea. I like the way you take your reader on a journey from the beginning of your line to the last line. Ending the poem with "that's what friends are for" really seals the deal and portrays the fact that God has placed friends in our lives to be there when we fall, or to give us their testimonies on how the walked through a similar situation. Good job and I would love to read more of your writings. This poem is certain to bring inspiration into the lives of your readers. "Write on" my friend.
Hello, I believe you have written catchy lyrics. Your idea is clear and you get your point across while providing the listener/reader with enough leeway that they can add their own experiences into the piece. This allows them to make this a part of their own situation. You have provided a great illustration of the feelings and thoughts the writer is experiencing. Good job and "Write-on".
Hello Jen H, I enjoyed reading your work. It seemed like a very enjoyable and exciting trip. I like the way you take your reader from the beginning of the trip to the end in a manner that allows the reader to feel your experienced emotions. Your work is very good, I would just add a little more of the five senses to allow your reader to more clearly experience your experiences. It is awesome how you were able to interact with the local culture and you expressed in a manner that allowed your reader to also experience the culture. I found that it could be beneficial for you to keep more control of your style by becoming more consistent with paragraph structure and spacing. Other than that you did a great job capturing the essence of your trip. Your story certainly made me want to go and visit the outback. I especially enjoyed your telling of the karaoke experience. Sounds like great fun. I thank you for sharing your story with us. Great job and keep on writing. I look forward to reading more of your work soon.
Hello, I enjoyed reading your work. I myself have been there and I also suffer from PTSD. I was a medic in the Army during the Gulf War. You have provided a vivid picture of what a soldier must endure during and most importantly after combat. You have done a good job writing this piece and I look forward to reading more of your writing. I like the way you formulate your thoughts and transfer them to your writing. Good Job and Keep on writing.
Hello, great poem. I like the way you draw your reading in and your style is lyrical. I enjoyed reading your work and would like to read more of your writings. It is certainly well written and enjoyable. You provided good description and kept it direct and to the point. Good work and keep on writing.
This is a very touching and sentimental poem. I enjoyed reading it and shared it with my daughter (she's 10). I like your writing style and I believe your poetry is well written. I like your style and in this day and time with so many soldiers being away from their "loves" the timing is very appropriate, though it can be applied to many situations. I felt that point of view because I am a veteran of the Gulf War and your poem touched my heart as it reminded me of being so far away from those that I loved. Great work and keep on writing.
Hello, I think you have a great poem here. It certainly creates the question in my mind. There are so many things I have experienced in this life but it is so easy to ponder on those that we have not experienced. I believe your poem is well written and lyrical. I like your style and hope to be reading more of your poetry soon. God Bless You and keep on writing.
Hello, I enjoyed reading your poem. It is amazing how vivid your description is as you paint a serious picture. You definitely bring your point across and do it is so few words. Certainly the work of a poet. I like the way you draw your reader into this world of despair and on through to the end. I realize this is not an easy feat, especially since you have just begun to write in English. Good work, I would love to read more of your work.
God Bless You and Keep Writing,
J.P. Ruiz
www.authorjpruiz.com
Hello, how are you doing today. I must say that your piece is well written, I know it made me want to take my son fishing. I live in Texas, so the snow part would be difficult here but fun-I'm sure. I would like to hear a little more about what happened on this trip, you know, relationship wise (that's just me though). I like that you kept your piece very clean and it is a nice story that should be shared with many. I enjoyed reading your story, it is inspiring to me.
God Bless You and keep writing,
J.P. Ruiz
www.authorjpruiz.com
Hello and from one Christian to the next, I would like to say that your story is very inspiring and bears witness to the wonderful power of God our Father. I too have suffered from depression and suicidal thoughts and it is a battle that the enemy (satan) wages upon God's children. He truly is out to steal, kill, and destroy. I am happy that God has placed you in my path because together we strengthen each other, both as writers and as Christians. I found your piece to be very well written and inspirational. I pray you continue to write and inspire more of us that battle these attacks and that God grants you the desires of your heart, Amen. God Bless You.
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