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Review by Jaimesen Chayse Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love writing... the one gift I didn't wonder how to open. It opened me... the holidy is everyday and never. I said to someone just recently.. yes my writing can be dark, morbid..historical...the pages of jaimesen for all her life. there are beautiful pages and my life today is full of unknown gifts and things I may lose or lost.

It’s funny how you want to make a life out of making her miserable.
I think of this person throughout time and how he (and then we can move through time) and say (they) but- these people alter us.

My writing is blood, breathing..the essential part of me for all I lost. I am also quite entertaining..do I want to draw some "writers- meow" about how unique I am? I am. I know his and so does the 2 or 3 people left in my life.

the people who cannot fathom how I am alive
The one who hates me and wonders where I am and if I am okay than states...I am his problem when in actuality..I hold a pen or type. I do not make fists

Sorry if that ever catches his eye. An eye for eye..say.
That will never change.
But I don't want pity. I want this life. An opportunity I need back desperately to regain the Jaimesen who must MUST RECLAIM the identity you may just take interest. I am a frightened and stubborn person. I cannot easily accept gifts.. yet I am infuriated that I all I want is to be free and express the scorn, the love, the humor, THIS PERSON who yes.. I am a NY woman who has never given up...but some things do get taken.. or taken away or are lost from you..
or someone has attempted to use "capable" means when you thankfully were "clever" to catch the lie - only to have it in your palm.

My hands are open.. My mind is a library... This would be something as when I was younger,, a member of "simply Everything" and took such pride and pleasure and honor in having the humble and grand opportunity to review works for others..

I wish I could grant myself a higher membership to start building back what was lost..to replace what is missing and to stretch the ink until it licks the screen and my heart will be happy..

I do not ever ask for anything except allowing me to breathe..and feel odd and be okay.
I want this. Thank you. And may this year please be new.

cheers,
Jaimesen Chayse
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Review by Jaimesen Chayse Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
a decade of brilliance, insight, and such devotion! I am simply so grateful for you since I first came upon you and your name was in my very top shelf of the encarta of Vivian the Great!


How are you!? Thank you...If you remember a Jaimesen- (some say of course- I laugh- cry- or apologize *smirk- but mostly- today in this moment when writing is still theonly when ten years have passed, you might think I had other mentionables that my heart can't -worn't is too raw to say not yet. But here is it is safe. Vivian is when I began and like the great pages I colleced in your book for learning, laughing, loving, leisure, and a writer- thank you.

Ten years. I want to tell you I love and we do one thing and that is say what we feel. I wonder how life is when you have such this amazing and to my gratititude, ability to be a vibrant and new and same and a constant...when I wanted to write and write and write. and my oxymoron laid down the broken law and over my strong mind broke the heard. duality- two dead men got up to fight, One bright day in the middle of the night. Back to back they faced eachother. Drew their swords and shot eachother. a deaf policeman heard the noise. Came and shot the two dead boys. If you don't believe this story's true (ask the blind man he saw it too)

And I was witnes. No other perfect counterparts draw the picture as the ironic perfect broken impossible and this was and my life is that depiction. We do not always have to write in our portfolio. The best writers are the one who inspire reviews- or just READ my heart from your inspiration. You broke my sad smile to sad again. Because I wish I wasn't dead, the one who shot me, is free, the bullet is a palm tree and florida is the huricane I felt when Sandy smashed my long Island head- beach and temple and salt and waves. I felt nothing but the screaming in the bloody caves to which I never knew for days.. my love broke my heart in my mind in my right, the side I saw my child when the temple was no longer sacred and safe, the gates of white had shattered-- I know my screaming was the blood and plate that I ate off every moment I never slept again, I lost my life, my world a New York scene of that I never with blue eyes in the ocean I am the dead and breathing to be again a zero ground I hit when all the pain was sound, my child, just a wee 5 months new- and vision, heart, thought, trust, I lost me in the moment I was blind sighted by the man I thought I couldn't - but it had been, struck and taken changed part plastic me. I miss my heart my Bella where is she.
I am going to put this on the post. and if reactions are hectic. I apologize. I lived long enough and got up and no this mind had a back up server. The soul, awaits to find her.

Jaimesen Today.
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Review by Jaimesen Chayse Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Flower3*Shrieks!!!!! this is so much FUN!!!!!! *Smile*YIP YIP YIP*Smile*
*Snow3*Hurrayyy!!!!! Congrats!!!!! 4 years!!!!!!*Snow3*

I love the colors, the zipppy little spirals, the balloons, and all the snazzy screen highlites!!!!
...and most of all... I love this site!!!

so here it goes.. my lil 'yodle lay heee hoo!

(Jaimesen clears her lalalalalalaaa..for a fabulous singalong...)

" *Balloon3*Happy Birthday to you! *Flower4*Happy birthday to you!

*ballon6*HappppPPPPYYYY birthDAYYYYYY to Writinggg...commmm...*Flower5* (wooppeee!}

*Flower2*Happy Birthday TO YOU!!!!*Flower5*!!!!!


thank you for such a great writing site, and a wonderful home for my love of writing...new friends, and tons of fun!! *Smile*.......
*Heart*Love, sprinkles, cherries, and sugary snow cones,

Jaimesen*Heart*Chayse

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Review by Jaimesen Chayse Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Anna! *Smile*

I am such a big fan of your poetry. There is so much soul in such a small amount of space on the page and you have this keen ability to bring the reader into the picture that you drew with your words.

In this poem, for example, it really is a lullaby that you are starting to sing, the story begins.. and then it grows darker and more intense, and then you shock the reader by ending the lullaby with something incredibley sad and literally unexpected.

*Note1*so many great lines and verses, but I took this one as a great example of how easy it is to fall into the lap of your poetry:

" You simply succumb to the
comforting dizziness"

Reading this poem, I knew this was no sweet soft pretty scene to begin with, but I just Loved the Darkness that Ooozes from your pen!

*Bullet*You have a real soft and haunting quality about your poetry...It's like a remarkable stain that gets bigger and grows deeper into the reader's mind..hypnotizing, and the more I read, the more I want to read...

Truly Amazing.

*Smile* As you are a new member to writing.com*Smile* *Star**SHRIEKS!!!WELCOME ABOARD!!!, I would be fascinated to read your bio, and I really look forward to reading more of your work.

congrats to a GREAT start!

and "write on!" *Smile*

sincerely,
Jaimesen*Heart*Chayse

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Review by Jaimesen Chayse Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Immediate Reaction: Very Intriguing.. Dark and disturbing..Haunting, with both savage imagery and broken beauty. Tearful.

I love every part of this poem for your talent is undeniable. Its topic also crushing, heartbreaking and alarming.

Your extremely talented use of symbolisms has shed a threatening light on this dismal portrayal of addiction and self-mutilation.

There is no question that you chose your title as perfectly as you chose your descriptive character..Sweet Mademoiselle (one of many defintions: a polite term for an umarried worman sometimes considered offensive) her moral fiber having:


“A white butterfly's wings
are as soft as tissue paper
delicate as virgin skin”


I was extremely saddened and moved by this butterfly, because in your first line:

“She used Razors”


For the obvious reason: To Cut Herself. This mutilation mixed with the idea of a butterfly seems to be a definate indication of a desire to change…but rather than finding change, whereas a butterfly's mutation is considered to be beautiful, breaking away from its own cacoon meaning freedom; so in this concept of mutation, you propose that you cannot escape your own skin, and so you resort to the most severe action, cutting yourself out of the trap of your skin…stating this is what temporarily makes the pain go away (temporarily because you cannot escape yourself) and so, in order to forget 'Madem’s' pain she has chosen to cut into something lovely and from the wholesome ‘virgin’ wings of “her” butterfly, the clothe is cut, and the image of innocence changes and the perception tears into an excruciating decision, and we learn the once wholesome butterfly, so “delicate”
*noting your incredible description~and your astonishing visual image of a feminine angel;

resembles your idea of life: perhaps "she" believes she can escape it, for it can be easily torn by anything that arouses emotion. Either the severe temperish side of life with its given pain, or love, *or lack of love, or brutality.. and she seems to now only believe that the severe cut of sharp tool (a razor) can bring relief.

Your next verse/body:


As she stared her eyes filled with bitter tears
angry tears that strangle men and beasts


again: that strangle men and beasts.
So is there relief? Not apparently.

I’m thinking about the fact that there is two sides to a butterfly, two sides to this woman.. Sweet Mademoiselle, Bitter Tears. She knows the taste her own blood and feels the duality of life’s ever changing heartbeat.

*Snow3* I must add, in truth, this poem really affected me in such a way, I can barely focus.. I think that is a tremendous statement about the intensity of this piece. It actually hurt me to read this and thunderstruck me…I’m not shocked, I’m just completely worried. But my role here is to say to you what I felt- so do I remove myself from all this emotion or just jump in like I’m diving into a giant crimson pool where I might sink with such a bold and captive mood written from your heart…

You have written this so well, one can easily find themselves caught inside the net...
if the butterfly could escape this dark, dark net..perhaps the man you mention in this poem, “his realm” of addiction, in which so much resentment, anger, hatred and sadness lies, this particular man seems to cause so much pain… and the butterfly is still caught in this horrific net.. the net perhaps being the skin as well?

Perhaps the net might either be an exposed shield for which there is no escape, the result is she seems to be trying to cut herself out, out of her own skin, perhaps out of "his" grip on her, and through her bitter/sweet tears-she knows that:

There is a constant fury, you cannot escape yourself, but if the wings of a butterfly meet, then the two sides become one.

so the young captive woman cannot change, she seems to believe pain she can flee through the sliver of white pure skin, but even that does not stop the pain, so your reference to something illicit, appears to be an option,
a second use of the severe and brash notion of a razor's edge.

what blew me away was I looked up "Hic et ubique" - I understood that in Greek it means "here and everywhere" as in your last line…but I wanted to know what the words meant in their separate parts:
--and I found that not joined by its mates, the words
mean,
hic: join
et :extraterrestrial
ubique: a derivative of a compound that acts as an electron carrier in reactions that occur in mitochondria during cellular respiration.

Essentially, I am not a science major (I was a brain surgeon, but that was “borrrrinnnngg”)
If I were to bend this as far as I could in interpretation, I found a strange combination that brought this thought to me:

alien-something outside our realm, or being, or planet,
and then there is also:
ubique: I read it to mean, (breaking it down to simplest form): a derivative that carries reactions within the body during respiration..oxygen representing the very obvbious, *Bullet*What we need to live…and if you combine something alien to our pure needs, then the chain reaction might be death.
Of course, your poem states simply here and everywhere. Where there is also death, chaos, and where there is love, there is also its opposites, pain, misery, life vs. death. Happiness vs. Sadness.

There is so much pain and power in your hands.

this is a frightening release of emotions by you...
Sweet Mademoiselle are you the butterfly?

In this very tightly wrapped poem, you have unleashed a world of pain upon the page and though I could say a million things about how incredible this poem is
for it's "sheer' influence",


Dear Writer,
to say that every word, every thought placed perfectly here, a display that taunts and invites the reader back to look at this piece again and again, and the obvious capacity you have with the written word, I also hope you have a
place of safety.


sincerely,
Jaimesen*Heart*Chayse

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Review by Jaimesen Chayse Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
hi.

thank you to everyone in this group for all you do.

you are supportive, wonderful, (anonymous at times! *Bigsmile*..)

but mostly, your recognition is just so darn nice..
kind hearted, and fully rewarding in return.

thank you.
Jaimesen*Heart*Chayse

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Review by Jaimesen Chayse Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Star*VIVIAN THE GREAT!!!! *Star*
omg...I faint.....

BRILLIANT!
MARVELOUS!
FABULOUS!!


*Star*AND MOST OF ALL TOTALLY INCREDIBLEY HELPFUL!!!!
3 CHEERS for Vivian Gilbert Zabel!! *Star* !!!

THIS IS INCREDDDDDIBLE!

*Blush* I LOVE this.*Heart* Every writer has their own little thing they do to keep their writing going strong.. (in my opinion) ..Their Magic Super Source.
and forgive me for not speaking in terms of the inner spirit magic stuff that is inside all of us.. the little "it" thing that Simon Cowell would say to writers...what would he say? egads..."Gee..that would make a fun contest.."
*Wink*!


It alllll started with a famous book right after the other few famous ones...and then the elementary and first crafty little books that helped writers and 'thinky-dinks' do their thing....you know...and one of Webster's proudest..I first thought..how am I supposed to look up the word when I don't know how to spell it?!? AHA! That was the whole GIG. the Teachers got us hooked!
*Smile*
and then..*Star*I'm no historian but when I discovered the other book that was highly essential to the dictionary and I think it was Mr. (hint) Last name sounds write.....(one of my favorite comedians.. and oh I know I am gonna get "kadoink-a doinked" for not saying his name:yet I quote:

*Bullet*"what's another name for thesaurus?" *Laugh*!! That DID IT!
And so I fell in love with words.....*Heart*

..a zillion books later... I can name a thousand things I lug around my house to and fro when I get into a serious writing mode.. (minus ONE COMPUTER) and I know for me.. I have created a Word-a Thaurus -or better known as Jaimesen's favorite words dictionary..it's like my geeky-spiralized teddy bear. I don't care. I love it.
And here I open the newsletter for poetry and KABAMM!!

New cool advice that I am psyched to print out and add to my collection.

*Star* I'm babbling!!! I get so babbly when I am happy! But I think this ROCKS- YOU ROCK and The Amount of effort you put into creating this Newletter for us- JUST ROCKS!!!!

**"What's another word for ROCK?" *Bigsmile* **

thanks Vivian. this is great.

*Printing!
Jaimesen*Heart*Chayse

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Review by Jaimesen Chayse Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
hi..

what a great folder...LOGOS! I have to compliment you entirely on how clever your logo design is for catwoman.
My husband does this for a living...(extends into web-branding), and so.. as he is currently sitting right next to me, I had to tap him on the shoulder to show him your logo. I'm sure you have already considered doing this professionally, if you are not already doing so. There is a website devoted to art design, I believe it is called: Craigs list.org
I would love to have my own logo (here comes the bribe!)..
just kidding! (well now, think it over...*Smile*
anywho-I know he takes a great deal of time and effort so I can truly appreciate how much you put into the artistry and in the witty creation of each one.

Very nice,

jaimesen chayse
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Review by Jaimesen Chayse Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
this was absolutely cute!

Congrats on the contest!!! I adore kittens. and this was such a cutely written lil poem,I'm in AWWW for your ever other word! I want to go play now! in fact- I think I need a hug! *Smile*

Smiles, Jaimesen
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Review by Jaimesen Chayse Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
WOW WOW WOW, I am just so speechless. My Heart goes to you and I just feel tears coming down my face.

This is so wrong. As for the piece itself, it is told with such great love, and yet the notion of the universe being balanced, I don't know if I believe in that completely--but I do believe this drunk driver got what was coming to him -if not directly.

ALL hearts. Emotional and tradgedy and I am so sorry for your suffering. We simply have no idea how many of us suffer our own deck of cards until we realize, we all have a pack of cards. And place them on the table one by one.

You never deserved this fate. I just really hope you have a beautiful life in front of you. Thankfully it seems you have a sincere and most gentle soul inside.

Respectfully, *Heart*
Jaimesen
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Review by Jaimesen Chayse Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi~~
Very cool contest...I love a challenge! this one was especially great because it intrigued the emotions in me that at times are (errghh) dormant, and how wonderful to feel such sweetness again tonight, by the words you chose... Your muse has done this particular writer a great thing, so thank you!!


Sincerely,
Jaimesen

(now back to "cranky and grumpy"!) *Wink*!
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Review by Jaimesen Chayse Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I confess: your work is simply DEVINE. Once I read
The Forest Primeval, I was very intrigued. I read this and wanted to let you know that there is a fantastic writer on here who goes by the name of:
~*Seven*~

She is running a contest : Parady of The Raven, and your POE style is so well written!
Dark Death Earthy and POEtic! You have a natural talent of combing lure with rhyme, story bound riddles...
I'm sure you may have seen it (this contest), but if not, I wanted to say I think this piece deserves high recognition .

Best,

Jaimesen Chayse
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