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Rated: E | (3.0)
This is good.
However, I personally think that the switch from using the singular term to plural in the 7th line is not in line with the poem.
The writer started with himself/herself so the 7th line should reflect that.
I suggest the 7th line should be edited to read "My hopes, my wishes, like lovers' kisses".
Otherwise, good work, and all the best.
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