Everyone loves a good story that is a twist on a fairy tale. This is an interesting one that I've never seen before. I liked it but I'm not sure if the whole Snow White as a lover's child was part of the original tale or not. If not, it was a great idea to show why and how much The Queen really hated the child. I have a couple of suggestions for this piece. The time passing by seemed to jump and skip a bit and it could be made clearer. Also the first part the pronouns got me a little confused about who she was talking about. A little ironing out of the narrations would help as well to make it flow better. I loved the twist at the ending of this tale since it wasn't one I'd ever thought about.
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