Nice rhyme. Beautiful construction. Short and concise. Bla bla bla--- What I am trying to get to though is the great spiritual connotation and portrayal of love for family. The truth of giving your concern to God in the situation where He will give you solace for your trust. There will be a return any time bread is cast upon the water with the heart right with the Lord. To write a beautiful poem like this surely comes from experience and is due more reward than the gift points I give you now. Thank you for sharing with me. Jimwithpen
Only one thing about this poem is not right for me. I would have had a 'd' on the live because time has overtaken parents as well as grandparents. I certainly had nostalgia well up in my heart as I read the part of the weeds in the yard. When i was a young boy my job was to help keep the weeds under control at my grandmother's house which was a true log house from the log house era. Jimwithpen
I felt love as a father and also as a grandfather while reading your wonderful poem. It shows a perspective we should contemplate with regularity. I could feel so directly involved in the subject matter of the poem that it is inducing me to award you some GPs. Jimwriter
What a parallel and such reflection on the point. I simply love this kind of poem. My feeble attempts to get it right can at least mean something to someone. Your take on the idea behind it all is so wonderful. I hope you continue to read my stuff and give such input to strike awe as you have. Thank you from my heart, Jimwithpen
I am not truly qualified to review as some who would read your work. I did form opinion as I read this poem. I am flabergasted at the way you have managed to put into words (much less a poem) the terrible things which happen in this world. If only more readers would set eyes on it. I have you in my favorite author list for a reason and will continue to check your postings. Jimwithpen
Being not the educated person I should have been, it will be difficult to say anything constructive in making improvements. This poem has merits for which all flaws simply must be forgiven and the theme must not be ignored. It is a beautiful and meaningful description of an attitude of understanding God and His power. How well it explains the cycle which the Master has arranged for our benefit. We only have to open our eyes to His work to see it. Your fine explanation in this poem should help many to look at God's way and to appreciate it. Jimwithpen
I am making a mistake trying to absorb all of your inspirational writings in one session. Flabergasting won't do for their effect on me. I will have to return at a later date with a fresh load of comments for your almost imaculate work. Forgive me for my lack of stamina. Jimwithpen
My eyes are not dry. I get so emotional while reading such wonderful and inspirational accounts of our Savior. It etches into my mind things which we should be giving to the lost with our writings. I am willing to venture a guess that the Lord is well pleased with you for your work in this field. Jimwithpen
This most beautiful poem is only possible to be written by one who has a personal relationship with the Almighty. I am seeing the beauty of the author in my mind as I write out this inadequate review. The next time I write something in this genre I will recall having read your own here on this site. I cannot give what it is worth but I give GPs to you for having shared this with me. Thank you so much. Jimwithpen
Such a beautiful little poem for children. I have a niece who works in that field (child entertainment) It is amazing how much can be done with a bit of literature for the benefit of the young. Some folks would fail to see how beneficial your writing of these things can be. This one almost brings out the preschool kid in me. ha ha ha Keep it up like a champion. Jimwithpen
It is beautiful. A bit different in that it has recurring line in each stanza but in new position. It immediately brought to mind one of my own poems. I love the picture too. Jimwithpen
If I am gathering the gist correctly the Mystery League is a means which means to inspire writers with incentives somewhat greater than mere words. It is a form of building up self esteem and drive to achieve a higher level of accomplishments in writing. I do think this practice is needed in the world we live in. For that cause I am willing to give GPs when I can.
Jimwithpen
I have found myself running out of description of my own appreciation for such absolutely beautiful work. I am in awe. I must express my elation at your poem. Jimwithpen
I am a great fan of rhyme and do not require absolute anything as far as the technical measures of such things are judged. I know this bit has possible failings in some of the affore mentioned but I am unable to give exact explanations with my limited knowledge of them. As an incentive to keep producing I am offering GPs with my appreciation of the poem. Jimwithpen
Very intriguing for someone who has lived a life deep inland. This poem has imagery of a way of life foreign to me and is interesting in the mystery of that. It not only gives a descriptive account of the physical surroundings but the mentality of the folks who inhabit the island. A wonderful bit to read.
Jimwithpen
A very possible scenario. Some poetry I read is in the extreme in emotional strength. Others may tip the scale so lightly as to be boring. But giving true credence to quality writing, poetry has ability to expose the base emotions and thereby generate original thinking on the subject. Nothing is as exciting for me as to find gem quality rhyme poems. I hope that I have assessed your short piece correctly. You have succeeded in showing that you did your self analysis. Jimwithpen
Clean neat and precise. A very accurate meaningful little poem. I am not versed well enough for making assessments of this work but I do venture a personal opinion. I looked it over very carefully and still do not find fault which is worthwhile to speak of. I cannot in good conscience leave it unrewarded. Take my token of GPs and know how I approve of your work
Jimwithpen.
As I read I learn to enjoy other forms of poetry than that which I write and post. This is a boon for me and is allowing me to give more accurate assessments of the work posted for reviews. Now it is time for my statement of the effect of your work on my thinking. I am gathering the gist of one who feels inadequate in prerequisites for poet authors. Maybe in all the varied ways of qualification. By no measure of acceptability to write any of the things which give writers respectability. Yet, it poured onto the page you have used for self denial. I must admit it has intrigued me with a beauty of its own. Jimwithpen
I feel this type of literature requires more time and thought than I am willing to apply. It is certainly attractive to behold. I am not particularly fond of the style but in appreciation of what it is I must rate it appropriately. I can imagine other styles of work produced by one who would willingly apply themselves in the same mannor. Jimwithpen
How I have searched the listings for poems of this high quality and for similar content. I immediately called my wife to read it to her. I told her it was a long sought nugget of literature which I can relate to. I really enjoy trying to come up with adequate praise for work such as I class this piece.
In the audible reading of it I noticeably choke with emotion. Not being highly educated I cannot give advice as to improvements in a literal sense but for my part otherwise it requires that I express appreciation somehow. I will award you the max. Jimwithpen
To write for a group which may be much younger is an art that requires a heart which must be much bigger. This also qualifies for an attention holder for that size audience when they get those inevitable 'ants in their pants'. I have a niece whose work is in that same field. She would like to hear the short poems you write. If it is OK with you I will adivse her of this site and your work. She lives in Michigan. Meanwhile --- Don't hesitate to produce more of these beautiful poems for future citizens. Jimwithpen
You have written a beautiful summary of your understanding of the scripture mentioned. It serves multiple purposes too. One of the first to come to my mind is to double check the chapter and verse. It is good for those like-minded to get an understanding of the setting by reading enough to know it is not out of context. I must give you a few GPs for both reasons. Hold fast to your faith. Jimwithpen
I have tried to write short stories but with no success outside true happenings of my childhood. This seems to have the quality of a true experience. With that in mind it take on a load of emotion due to the natural sympathy of folks for children. Maybe that is the intent of this story. Either way, it turned out to be a very touching account of life. I can gather another facet of feelings about it from having been slightly intraverted as a youngster. I am going to give points for your efforts. Jimwithpen
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