I think your poem creates some gorgeous imagery in the natural setting. You paint the scene very well.
Some of your langauge choices seemed somewhat technical compared to others. For example, using phrases like "such rich abundant nutrients" and "satiate their appetites"somewhat clash with other lines that are more natural.
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