This is an interesting tidbit - I did enjoy the premise and you've done a good job at creating the setting. I will say that I felt there are a few too many commas, and it causes this piece to be a bit jerky to read - Otherwise it's well written. Again, I compliment you on your ability to create an intriguing atmosphere with so few words; well done :)
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