Sir, I enjoyed reading your story. I understand your intentions are to remind the reader that morals are still our basic necessities to happiness. This is the kind of story that (E)veryone can read and understand. Thank you. Indeed Prof. Moriarity there is no need to be stressed. Allayer.
Kathie Hi, I chose to read your story because I'm also challenging myself to my first fiction attempts (see..Dear Jane) PLEASE!!. I see where you're going with this because you TOOK me there but I wanted to go there myself in my imagination. I like drama, an explosion of emotions to be exact. I felt that your details were loaded with potential breathtaking, heartstopping moments e.g Wendy, the fire engine lover who also sells the most girl scout cookies and LOVES to boast about it. I was ready to chuckle. Better still the killer was the Maytag man(!) how appropriate. That knife should have made me say .."that's Maytag for you." You've got me wondering if you were deliberately abstract. Remember Kathie, I'm no expert just your potential favorite fan. Keep on writing maybe the same story. I'd love to see where you will take me. Allayer.
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