Great imagery! It made me think of our minds as a "mall" with many "stores" (memories). The "whirling pull" of melancholy is never ending spiral. Great job! "FIGHT FOR LIFE!"
This is a beautiful expression of the emotion and power of touch. Our hands do have such a strong ability to convey healing in all arenas of life: spiritual, emotional, mental, and physical. Keep writing and keep exploring the capacity of healing hands!
The ol' bait and switch (smiles). You were talking about a man! Brilliant. I was totally taken into the 4th of July imagery. Again, brilliant. Wait...one more time...Brilliant! Keep it up.........
Great perspective on Eve. My favorite line..."Too bad she didn't throw the serpent into the lake." The only critique is that I believe she ate from the tree of knowledge of good and evil not the tree of life.
I love your Grandma! I look forward to meeting her one day in heaven. Simple mustard seed faith in Jesus conquers huge mountains. Keep writing Marilyn. You are a light here at WDC.
Kathie: Such a sobering, redemptive story. The setup sequence really helped the ending deliver the punch of the wisdom delivered by the character. Also, there are beautiful details throughout such as "whiskers heavy with snow" and "smell of cherry tobacco". Nice work and wordsmithing.
This is creative, funny, and makes great use of rhythm. I enjoy "western" themed pieces and this one was a jewel. Well chosen wording as well. Good job!
Very evocative of my love of sports. Also, it is VERY true of us guys. I think I need to go play catch with my son now (smiles).
Excellent rhythm. It flows well and reads smoothly. Keep it up!
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