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Review by Angelo Caduto Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This was really good. You sound exactly like my biology teacher in the third and fourth paragraph. He is always telling us this.

Well anyways, I really like this piece and if you write essays for the most part, you've found your calling.

I did fing one mistake though:
Males are as wll more willing then(I think you missed something here ^ )

Wings of an Angel
Horns of Satan
I am Angelo Caduto
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Review by Angelo Caduto Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I wish I had some chocalate right now. Just reading your story makes the reader have the taste for the delicious cocoa treat.

I do have one critism though, but it is also a compliment, the vocabulary that you use is very vast and wonderful but some may get confused, some word even confused me (such as the word 'eke'). To me it sounded 'bittersweet' if I may say. You could have instead used 'draw or pull out'

Other then that, wonderful and keep writing

Wings of an Angel
Horns of Satan
I am Angelo Caduto
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