I loved that!The descriptions and imagery were amazing. Your writing was extremely captivating from beginning to end. I really enjoyed the read, thanks so much!
Very cute! I liked it a lot. It had a very warm and comfy feel and the imagery was excellent. Maybe too much in the first sentence. It is really good don't get me wrong but It's a lot to follow and I don't think you need to add so much detail into one sentence. The rest of the story I enjoyed a lot. Thanks for the read!
Super cute! I loved it. It flowed very nicely and had a positive vibe to it. The end was definitely a plot twist and I really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing!
I feel that this piece is very fast paced if that makes sense. It's definitely original and I certainly like it a lot. I read it as a more humorous piece, I'm not sure if that's how it is intended or not though so I apologize if I misunderstood it.
The beginning is amazing! It has very descriptive imagery that really allowed me to step in their shoes. I could imagine that room and the emotions without a problem. Towards the end I felt it got a bit confusing and I think saying that "This is how it is every night...every day too." kind of took away from the importance of the situation. It made me feel at least like it wasn't as serious or frightening. I loved it overall! I really enjoyed the read, thank you.
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