Hey there., So i am going to write a review for one of the nicest story writer i have come across.
Tom, I must say I have become a fan of your timing of story telling.Great usage of words.Keep up the good work Tom.
Now moving on to the depth. The Start was good. You were successful in making me (as a reader) indulge in your story. It was thrilling. Characters were well defined and well placed, and that's too a mark of a good writer.
But then in later part, somewhere in the middle of the story, it becomes quiet boring. You have also created a mysterious character (a girl who meets the Lead in the building with the grumpy dog), and you could have used them as a key part in the story, but at the end they are of no meaning which creates a hole in the mind of reader which is a negative effect on the reader's mind for your story.
So, Tom, i must say that your story did great at the starting, but eventually it became boring to some extent.
This is just my point of view Tom.
Anyways, you definitely are a good writer Tom.
I rate this 3/5.
Thank You.
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