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Review of Abbey  Open in new Window.
Review by Jade Amber Jewel Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! I'm Jade Amber and I'm giving you a review!

This is a beautiful poem about looking at the universe.

It seems to be a free verse poem, if I'm not mistaken.

The way you've worded the whole poem can make me imagine the night sky as a giant curtain, with each star painted on that curtain with its own unique pattern, and me leaping through the sky, swiping at clouds and flying every time I bounce from a cloud.

And when you can do something like that to the reader, you've made a poem worth reading. *Smile*


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Review of Grandma's House  Open in new Window.
Review by Jade Amber Jewel Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! I'm Jade Amber and I'm giving you a review!

This is a beautiful story of the drive to Grandma's house.

You write like a writer.

You're a natural.

But of course, with every good writer, there's bound to be a mistake.

When you mention the pine trees and evergreens, lowercase the p and t in 'Pine Trees' and the e in 'Evergreens'.

This has the feeling of being told from a seventeen or eighteen year old grandchild, but the question is, is the character male or female?

Though there is a part that confuses the reader.

The line 'You think with a smile on your lips' might make the reader think that they are the character driving to Grandma's, but in the details, it says that this story is from experience.

But all in all, this story is a very good read. *Smile*


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Review by Jade Amber Jewel Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi I'm Jade Amber and I'm giving you a review!

This is a good article. It helps people see that pain is a part of life and everyone struggles with it.

The only problem is the errors.

Through out the entire article, people see misspellings and punctuation issues everywhere.

From words missing capitalization to words being misspelled, it makes it hard to read the article!

I want to "see your flower garden", but before I can, you have to "get rid of the weeds".

I know you have wonderful words of wisdom in there, so if you want help, feel free to send me an email. I'll be happy to help with what I can. *Smile*


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