This was a good story. I love any sort of true crime or mystery story. There were a couple of lines that I found were too descriptive and took away from the story. You don't have to describe a characters nervous tic unless it is extremly important to the story. There were also a few words that I didn't understand what they meant, like acquiesced and it confused me.
The story was very interesting and I want to keep reading this. I found your story under "newbies" so I assume this might be one of your first stories and I know as you go on writing it will get even better. Can't wait to read more!
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