This little story was great. How one one little gesture can make up for Valentine's days past. Your son is a very special young man and your very lucky to have him in your life. I shall read more of your work. They keep me interested the whole way. Of course no spelling or grammar issues. Well Done!
Wow this was really good. At first a just thought this girl was just paranoid, but from the ending, I can clearly see this was a downward spiral from deep depression. I guess no one really knows what causes it when seemingly nothing is wrong, but you had a brilliant way of conveying the message. Very Good Job!
Drama productions huh? Ya know i was in my h.s play. But enough about me. I enjoyed your little piece of self expression and how writing gives you the same excitement your son gives you when you see him after a period of time. I only found 1 error: wreck havoc on my nerves/ I think you meant wreak..hey but I could be wrong, your the teacher afterall. Nice Job!
Let me tell ya something. I got so into these last two stories but was disappointed at the end. Are they chapters to a bigger story? I was actually expecting someone other then his partner, that was trying to kill him. Ver well written however excepy for this one sentence I didnt understand: The doctor shook his head. “Nasty wound that./ other then that nice job!
Pretty good story. Written very well with no grammar or puctuation issues. I wish you would have given us more at the end. I would have liked some finality to the story. You didnt say if the shapeshifter ever killed a human. Thats why im interested to know how they would know to calm themselves when attacked. Overall, kept me interested, just wanted more. Nice job!
Poor Jose, if only he were thinner..lol. Very good story. Believe it or not, I actually saw a a news show that had a man dangling just like your story does. Fortunatley he survived. Nice flow, kept me interested all the way. No grammar or puctuation issues that I saw, nice job!
See, sometimes your prayers do get answered! I only detected one puncuation problem: mothers house- should have an apastrophe. Nice little tale, i got a chuckle out of it..nice job!
Very well done for a contest entry. I guess he comitted homocide/ suicide. As with all your stories. No grammar or puncuation issues I could detect. I like your stories, keeps me guessing til the end. Nice Job!
A few funny lines in there that I chuckled out loud at. I dont know to much computer mumbo jumbo, so it wouldnt be fair to judge this other then it was a nice short story which garnered some laughs. Nice Job!
Bravo! I was completely fooled by this story and I like it like that! I found absolutley nothing wrong with this story. Tell Alison thanks for getting the World annihilated, foolish little girl and her nosy antics. Loved it!
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