This story has surely caught my attention. It makes you think about what the afterlife truly has to offer, I wonder how many people think this is what the afterlife will be like. I am looking forward to your interpretation of the afterlife. The story really flowed well together and was easy to follow. I didn't really notice any grammatical errors. Great job, looking forward to the rest of the story. Keep on writing!
Very nice work! I love the way the poem flowed and the message it sent. I think people should express their love for the Lord more often, he is the reason we are able to do the things we do. I like the descriptions you used and I didn't notice any errors. Great job. I truly look forward to reading more of your work. Keep on writing!!
Nice poem. The beginning was a little a hard for me to understand at first, I had to re-read it a few times. But the overall poem was nice and the end flowed very well. I think you may need to word a few things differently, just a suggestion. Look forward to reading more. Keep on writing!
I really enjoyed the story. I only saw two grammitical errors, but nobody's perfect. I think you have great potential and I like the way you wrote with emotion. Looking forward to reading more of your work!
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