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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Great suspense; not too little, not too much. Perfect balance there.

I also liked the idea of telling straight away that they're dreams, instead of saving that for the end - it adds something, without taking anything away from the piece. Your word choice is brilliant.

One thing I would suggest is fluffing out the beginning more.
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